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Dear daughter-I-do-not-have-yet,

You will be my perfect. You will be my proudest moments in one small person. You will be made in love, or maybe anger, or maybe even desperation. But that won't matter. What matters is what you will be made into.

You will have Daddy's hair and his nose, and my eyes and my smile, the smile that happens not because someone with a camera told you to, but because you're genuinely happy. But you will have your very own heart and will be full of all the things that give you your you-ness. Whether you sing in the bath or make Valentines for everyone in your class or give your last homemade chocolate chip cookie to the boy sitting alone at recess.

I will write you poems and stories about how you are my miracle. I will read them to you sometimes, just to remind you. As you grow, not a day will go by that I'm not thankful for everything you are. You will be dazzling and beautiful and brilliant and compassionate and playful and curious and all of the things I was too scared to be.

You will learn how to dance before you can walk. I will teach you numbers by counting the stars in the sky. I will teach you colors from the world around you – "look, the sky is Mommy's favorite color today." You will absorb everything - the sounds, the lights - through your skin like a balm.

When you are born, your Daddy will cry because he's never seen anything so beautiful. He may not love me forever, but he will never have any doubts about you. "Look," he'll say the very first time he holds you, showing you this overwhelming, magnificent world outside the window, "all this is yours."

Growing up is not an easy thing. But remember that it's okay to not know. It's okay to just take it as it comes. People will come and go, and make you laugh and break your heart. There might be someone who crumples your smile like a used tissue. But promise me you'll never stop loving, no matter how much it hurts.

You will be my warrior, my brave flower. When people pour lies and hurtful words into your ears, I will come along with a sieve and replace them with what is true.

You will make the world a better place, simply by being a part of it. You will take the sunny days and collect them for rainy ones. You will prove to your daddy what love is. You will discover every day that life is going to be confusing and scary and wonderful, but I know you'll go through it all with a smile, the smile that happens not because someone with a camera told you to, but because you're genuinely happy.

When pulling petals, remember that the answer will always be "she loves me."
In answer to the prompt: "What are you here for?"

I wrote this in fifteen minutes.
I know there are cliches and such, but it's one of the most sincere pieces I've written in a long time.

I'm going to be an awesome mom someday, you guys.

Questions.
:bulletblue: Is this relateable?
:bulletblue: Any cliches I should get rid of?
:bulletblue: How does this piece make you feel?

Critique here.
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Morning-Star-42 Featured By Owner Sep 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
That  is beautiful.
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
This is late by so many months, but I just wanted to say thank you!
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hugthedragons Featured By Owner Jul 1, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
I discovered this through the Daily Deviantion today, and I am literally crying, which I never do for any piece of literature. This was so powerful, have a llama and a favorite! Clap 
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, thank you so much for your kind words! I am so touched that you felt so strongly about this piece. :heart: 
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hugthedragons Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2014  Student Traditional Artist
You're welcome! Keep writing, you have truckloads of talent!
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Dec 17, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! 
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autumnlit Featured By Owner Sep 25, 2013
:blackrose: Your beautiful prose has been featured here: fav.me/d6nss4z
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Oct 3, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you! 
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KiaraGoldsward Featured By Owner Mar 28, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
I actually just cried. This is...beautiful and amazing and just perfect. So all I can say is just...thank you. Thank you for writing this :)
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I am honored, thank you so much. :heart:
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KiaraGoldsward Featured By Owner Mar 31, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome ^^
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Solarune Featured By Owner Sep 21, 2012   Writer
Awwwwwww. :love:
I'm afraid I have no monster comment for you on this one, just... awwww! :tighthug:
Also, congrats on the DLD you wonderful person. <3
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Sep 22, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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WaKip Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012   Writer
-Yes, I did find this quite relateable in strange ways. Both in the sense that I hope to become this mother some day, and in the way that I'm a little envious of this daughter, though shes not even here. I never really had much of a mother myself, she was there, but not there, you know? Ah, but thats about all I'll say before I "TOO MUCH INFORMATION!" you xD
-I actually felt like a lot of this felt pretty original, I can't really see anything that felt directly cliche. Some of it had a little of that feeling, but in honesty I still wouldn't like them changed, they're really well put and appropriate, so why would I?
-Both inspired to one day become this mother, to one day treat my child just like this, but as I said, envious and very sad at the same time. It was kind of mixed.
Beautiful piece, I absolutely loved it. Fantastic job, I'm happy to give this critique on it and add it to my favorites~
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much for the lovely comment and the fave! :heart:
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WaKip Featured By Owner Aug 18, 2012   Writer
No problem :)
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012   General Artist
Congratulations n the DLD, you lovely, lovely soul! :tighthug:
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, dear! :heart:

And thank you for the fave as well. :love:
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Sammur-amat Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012   General Artist
You are most welcome:heart:

Always :love:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012   Writer
:iconcongratssignplz: ...on your DLD ... Pick of the Day! ... :iconclappingplz: ... :iconfireworkplz:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012   Writer
:blush: ...and I could scroll down a touch more and see I already left this congratuation note.
Please excuse the double-post.
(Aiyiyi.)
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Carmalain7 Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012
Whoa! Pick of the Day! :party:
I don't think i've ever even gotten one of those, that's how much better of a writer you are than me. ;p
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:la:

Oh hush, you. :lol:
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VertigoArt Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Professional Writer
I wrote a letter to my daughter several days before she was born and I plan on giving it to her when she turns eighteen. It tells her that her parents are not perfect but we try to be for her. Our children are an extension of us and it is our job to assist them through life and help mold them into something wonderful.

You have done a nice job here portraying some serious emotion and for that I commend you. Keep writing for your little one, she will eventually appreciate it and will treasure it. My mother was something of an absentee parent and I wish she was more involved. Show her that you will always and are always involved in her life. Show her through words, but more importantly show her through actions.
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:

When the day comes, I hope I'll be an amazing parent ad I'm sure you are.
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012   Writer
:iconcongratssignplz: ...on your DLD Pick of the Day! ... :iconclappingplz: ... :iconfireworkplz:
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:faint:
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xlntwtch Featured By Owner Aug 15, 2012   Writer
Speechless? Hope not. We'll do a... :highfive:
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DailyLitDeviations Featured By Owner Aug 13, 2012
Your wonderful literary work has been chosen to be featured by DailyLitDeviations and has been selected as our "Pick of the Day". It is featured in a news article here: [link] and on our main page.

Keep writing and keep creating.
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Aug 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you!
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thybird2-2 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
Beautifully written. Absolutely gorgeous
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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chsehd41 Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012
So very, very nice.
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :hug:
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flummo Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2012  Student Writer
This was absolutely... oh, god, I teared up. And the way you ended it was just perfect. Beautiful, this is beautiful.
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:heart:
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TrU-iNSaNiTY Featured By Owner Jul 30, 2012  Student General Artist
I love this. Kinda reminds me of the relationship I have with my mum. :)
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
:aww:

So glad you liked it!
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TrU-iNSaNiTY Featured By Owner Aug 1, 2012  Student General Artist
Welcome!
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UnspecifiedUnknown Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2012   Writer
this actually brought tears to my eyes
(gross, i hate crying)

but thank you for this, as cliche as it sounds. you did well, and it resonated with me through and through. :heart:
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Jul 25, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you so much. :heart:
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w-anderlust Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2012  Student Writer
This is amazing.
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IndigoSkyes Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you. :heart:
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w-anderlust Featured By Owner Jul 18, 2012  Student Writer
You're welcome :heart:
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