Embedded poetry is taking a line from a pre-existing poem and building a new poem around it.
My line is "And I've spent all this time feeling something you can't feel at all, oh, you're a machine." This is from the song Machine
by Josh Groban (fast-forward to 6:30). Go listen to it. It's glorious. Also, I'm in love with him, so.
P.S. (Wtf why aren't they lining up.
Questions for #theWrittenRevolution
Did I successfully incorporate the themes of war, machines, and love?
Are there any cliches I didn't manage to dodge?
What do you think the tone is?
Are there any awkward lines/images?
Can you identify with this at all?
And here's the critique
. Sorry it's so long and rambling and random.