This was written from the prompt where we were supposed to take our most shameful moment and then put a twist on it. My most shameful moment was all of 6th grade, where I had the hugest crush on my English teacher and I though no one knew. Although, of course, everyone knew.
Silly me. Anyway, this is full of so. much. angst. And yes, you are allowed to laugh. Oh, teenagers.
And now, QUESTIONS:
Is the voice done well?
Do you sympathize with the narrator?
What time period/geographical location would you say this was?
Would you have liked a surprise ending?
Would you have liked a dirtier
ending? (This is me being a pervert; you needn't answer.
Any technicalities I missed?
As I said before, this is terribly angsty, but did you feel that it was well-expressed angst, or just "my heart bleeds black roses and we were all born to die and why aren't i pretty gawd" kind of angst?